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My heart beats fast when I see you
And I find myself lusting
But you want me less
The more I want you

My actions feel desperate
Chain myself to a pole
To try and stop
From calling you

Again…

My desires overwhelm me
Throw myself in the fire
Scorched for no reason
And rejected by you

My mind is made up
No more your adorer
I’ll break through the chains
That tie me to you

I’ll make you not matter…

My heart hurts from the pain
I know you don’t want me
But then everything
Reminds me of you

My temptations grow larger
And I find myself drawn
Back to the torture
Of my one sided addiction

As I reach for the phone…
Well. I recently bought a new album by Fall Out Boy. Pretty good album. Okay, awesome album if I do say so. Been listening to it non-stop and this results in some inspiration and some *shock horror* poetry. Be afriad. I'm happy with most of it but it's now gotten to the point of the night where sleep looks more appealing than editing a poem... so it can damn well stay as it is! :) It'll be fine... I hope...
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agnijith Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2007  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Excellent........ Trust me, I've been through that.
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2007
thank you and thank you so much for the fave, it means a lot!! :)
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Oli-86 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2007   Writer
Great imagery , and those lines between stanzas act like subtitles giving the poem a great effect. Love the theme too.
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notit Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2006
I like it, it's really got me thinking.
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Apsinthion Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2006
aweosme lol...imma comment on this 2.. the hole poem rolls of your toungue...i read t like 5 times cuz i like the way it sounds...jus all fits together....g4 i read it i saw the "Again...." N wa slkike noooooooooooo!!! cuz i hate 1 words getting a line to them selves....poetry is about (in my opinion)...word together as you read them if you get it...but in this circumstance i am totally wrong b/c it sounds good i actualy like it...gonna read it again :)
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2006
thank you! you're so nice to take such a detailed look at so many of my poems!!! :hug: i'm so appreciative!
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AshuraMGS2SUB Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2006
Wow, that is creepy. It reminds me of what I was doing for the past 6 months or so. Less stalking like, but more crawling back after being betrayed by someone constantly.

Sorry, I didn't mean that your poetry is creepy. On the contrary, all I can really say is...wow. The way you can write with such morbidity (is that a word?) without it seeming forced or corny is inspiring. I wish I had that sort of control over it with my storywriting. This really speaks to me, especially since have felt like what you've written to an extent at times.

I'm regretting not finding the time to read through your poetry before now. I've definitely missed out. It's a shame that I'm working tomorrow, coz I now don't have the chance to read through the rest of your poetry until another time. I definitely will tho.

Very well done. ^.^
:+fav:
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2006
Thank you so much! It means a lot that it means something to you! its amazing! and such a nice comment! Thanks again :hug: you're a legend!
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AshuraMGS2SUB Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2006
Well, I wouldn't go as far as calling me a legend, lol. Seriously, there's no need to thank me. Just saying what I feel. ^.^
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FrozenDruidess Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2005
Never heard of them....maybe I should download some...Ive been stuck on Mars Volta =P
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2006
thank you. and u should give fall out boy a shot, they're emoish but cool! :)
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FrozenDruidess Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2006
I heard some of one of their songs. Theyre ok so far...not too much my style but Im flexible =P
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FrozenDruidess Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2005
Oh I forgot to say...Awesome poem =D
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Blu-Winters Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2005
Concept and imagery are terrific, your word use is very good and you never fail to amaze. I was moved by this and well your emotive technqiues are very impressive. Excellent structure, awesome work ^^ and w00t for falloutboy :w00t:
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r-o-x Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2005
Terrific poem! You draw the reader in with emotions so stromg, sharpening memories blurred by time,bringing old feelings into the present. *S*
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2005
thank you so much! i'm glad you read/ liked it! :)
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NocturneAdima Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2005
Some great images there. I thought of witch trials. When burned, a witch would be chained/tied to a pole over the bonfire. Befere that they would be tortured to confess (Killed if they confessed, killed if they denied) or checked to see ifthey were witches by being thrown into a stream or something tied down by rocks for some time (If they survived, they were a witch and to be burned, if not then they were inoccent and dead...to bad for them.)

Sorry for the morbidity. Anyhow I thought this poem was pretty cool. Nice and evocative.
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2005
thanks, yeh the witch trials were generally morbid...
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2005
thanks!
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ToByMcMaHoN Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2005
great poem angel, who have u felt like this with? and u have really nailed the emotion...
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2005
when i first met you was one of them. its just a romantic take on being unnapreciated in general. sometimes i feel like that with some of my friends, like rejected/ un wanted with natacha and stuff...
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ToByMcMaHoN Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2005
You were always my angel from afar. And now I have you its better then I could have ever imagined. And im sure ur friends appreciate you, they can just b a bit misguided sometimes.
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RufusMador Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2005  Professional Artist
wow i can really relate to this, if i had a dollar for everytime i felt like that i'd have ALOT of money
hell i would have made most of it in the last 3 months. its deep, meaninfull and fucking sad. i like it. well done kitten.
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2005
thank you. but thats sad u feel like that lots cause its not a fun emotion... i've been there a couple of times :hug:
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Mysterys-Web Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
:salute: lovely you captured the emotions very well indeed interesting style which suited the poem made more serious and somehow more convincing
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2005
thanks so much and for the +fav! :)
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Mysterys-Web Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very very welcome :D
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dwarfin Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2005   Writer
i can understand your feelings. you describe the emotions if you love somebody who does really not love you... horrible, falling deep and deeper, becoming the saddest person of the world...
but luckily i found HIM, without falling in black holes... hope your poem is not true in your case?

:hug:
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2005
yeh luckily it's not true in my case but i'm glad you liked the poem! :)
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Cradlegrrl333 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2005   Writer
I found this to be a very heart-felt and upsetting poem to me. So many people go through this, and I'm sure it's never easy.

'My desires overwhelm me
Throw myself in the fire
Scorched for no reason
And rejected by you' -

Loved this stanza. :) Good work, once again.
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2005
thanks! :)
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Soldierofmisfortune Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2005
Yay, new poem by both me and you! :dance: We rock!
It's very good. And I can certainly relate to the problem presented in it too... sadly.
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2005
Thank you, i'm glad and yet its kinda sad that u can relate! thanks for the +Fav too! :)
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Syuzin Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2005
Fall Out Boy rocks!!! ...and so does your poem...love it. *S*
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insanity-streak Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2005
yay! fall out boy are awesome! thanks for the kind comment!
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